Saturday, January 22, 2011

Crocodile Tears


Saturday Centus is here again, and with it comes a new prompt and a specific genre: science fiction. (ugh) The good news is that we get to add 100 words in addition to the prompt, which is in red.

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Crocodile Tears

"Beam me up, Scottie..." Laura clicked off the TV and settled into their new-generation tempurpedic. One more Star Trek re-run, and she’d turn into a pumpkin. “A Vulcan,” she corrected, her voice too loud for the setting. But what did it matter? He’d vanished so silently and completely he might never have been there at all. What kind of man slinks away in the night, without warning? “A Reptilian,” she replied, shouting at the empty room as if he were still there to hear.

Lightyears away, he panics. “Coincidence,” he insists fervently to his scaly superior, but it’s too late. She’s already been neutralized.

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31 comments:

Amy said...

Oooooh! I just got the chills reading this. Good one, Sue!

anitamombanita said...

Nicely done, Sue. But I have to laugh - I'm so unpoetic. I got stuck on "Beam Me Up, Scottie" and all I could think of was a photo of Jake, our Scottie, staring into space (stalking moths)... a friend, upon seeing the photo, labeled it "beam me up, Scottie"

The photo is at http://www.flickr.com/photos/13110897@N05/5246019916/in/set-72157624959220941/

Dixie Mom said...

Ha! I think you may have found your new calling!

beam-me-up-scottie said...

That was excellent! :)

Terra said...

Oh Sue, that was truly very well done. I didn't expect the ending - it was wonderful. Really, wow

5thsister said...

Standing O for this one. You achieved sci-fi perfection in my book. Bravo!

Judie said...

What a great ending, Sue! You nailed it!

Cherie said...

That was awesome sue - Great ending!

You inspired me to finally get on the ball and join this week!!

Bookie said...

This is really great! I could never have done this kind of response and you did it SO well.

Jocelyn Christensen said...

That's what Congressman Trafficant always used to say...

Viki said...

Oh this was so good. Kinda creepy LOL. Good job.

~Lissa said...

Ooh really great job with the genre and fabulous ending!

Jess said...

I suppose that's what one should expect from intergalactic affairs- scaly business those reptilian lovers.

Darlene said...

I got a kick out of this one, and I'm sure Dick did too. He is a true Star Trek fan, as you know, and I could almost hear the Star Trek theme as I read this. Or it may have been Dick's cell phone.

Dazee Dreamer said...

ok, for some reason, that just gave me goosebumps. NOOOOOOOO

Tgoette said...

LOL! That was a very cool story, Sue! For being a tough challenge with this sci-fi genre, you really pulled it off brilliantly. Great Centus!

Kat said...

You did a fantastic job with this Sue. I just couldn't get into the whole sci fi thing. You nailed it. I loved the ending, totally unexpected. I loved this! Kat

RockiBottom said...

Fantastic play on words!!!

Grandma Yellow Hair said...

Sue you really are a awesome person and writer.
Always love coming by here and enjoying your work.
Love
Maggie

Grandma Honey said...

Interesting way to handle science fiction!

Ⓙ @ $ € € ₦$ ₣®0₥... said...

Creative and a little scary for those of us with great imaginations, Sue. I think I recognize the Reptilian as an ex-husband of a friend of mine.

Cheryl said...

Very cool take on this one!

linda said...

Creepy...
and very well done.

karen said...

Yes...that was creepy. Is there nothing that stumps you?

Karen S. said...

Okay...errie some, but mostly just cool and funny! Thanks!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Sue, I'm ever impressed. You told a story that leaves me wondering; packed it with humor, romance and tension; and I love the outbursts the characters have when alone. It all feels very sci-fi, too.
You really are brilliant.
xoRobyn

VK said...

I think you should now go out and write a si-fi, or maybe just a sequel for Star Trek. I'm sure there's a market for that, and you seem to know all the jargon. teehee
Seriously, you do have a great imagination.

Ames said...

I can see it. You pulled this one off very well Sue!~Ames

Nancy Jane said...

Bravo...brilliant piece.

Rek said...

A great piece of writing...a Sci-fi with disastrous consequences....some aliens can't be trusted...

Jenny said...

Oh Sue. This was absolutely tremendous! Wow, wow and wow!

I think you can pretty much write any style, any genre.

You are amazing.

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