Saturday, May 21, 2011

Vanishing Act

A fellow Centusian, Dazee Dreamer, graciously dreamed up today's prompt for Jenny Matlock, our favorite meme-meister. I've added slightly less than 100 words to give life to this mini-tale I tell. The prompt, as always, is in red.

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Vanishing Act

©2011 Susan Noyes Anderson

She’d been disappearing for weeks, if such a thing were possible. Clues were fleeting: an odd translucence to her fingers, the soft break in her voice when she was talking, a feeling that her clothes were not quite filled.

This morning, though, she couldn’t feel her feet. Fear flamed, reached out, and raised her grandma’s voice: Close your eyes, Gracie. What you can’t see, can’t hurt you. Slamming those revealing orbs shut, she centered. Ridiculous! Absurd. And yet, the creeping dread still forced her down the hallway. Groping…blind…would terror be confirmed? She looked. Gasped. The reflection in the mirror was no more.

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27 comments:

Amy said...

Dearie, you are so talented! I love your imagination! What a cute little story that I want to read more of.

Ames said...

I love this! Wouldn't it be fun if we could become transparent? Who knows, maybe we do, at death. Great one Sue!~Ames

Dina @ 4 Lettre Words said...

You are so, so talented, Sue! I want more...

Amanda said...

This is so good, are you sure you're not related to H. P. Lovecraft?

Bookie said...

Wildly creative today!

Happier Than a Pig in Mud said...

That was really fun:@)

Karen Mortensen said...

That gave me the chills. Excellent once again.

Christine said...

Imagine the fun she could have now, being invisible. This was flowed so well I want to know more.

Judie said...

OMG! Sue, this is just so perfect! And the music you chose really amplifies the theme. What a wonderful take on the prompt! What music is that?

Cherie said...

Very appropriate for this day of "The Rapture". Ha Ha

yaya said...

More please! Very good Sue and there are many times I wish I could just disappear!

Stacy Crawford said...

I love your short stories. I just wish I could read more!

Grandma Honey said...

And to think it all started with "the reflection in the mirror" !
You have such a creative mind that I wonder what your dreams are like.

Farmer's Wyfe said...

Oh, how could you?! You grab us in with this beginning and then that's it!? Great post. I loved it! :)

Myrna Foster said...

If you wrote more, I'd read it.

Brian Miller said...

ooo this was delightfully chilling...

i hope you have a wonderful sunday!

jfb57 said...

OMG! Stunning & so chilling. The hairs are stood bolt up right on my neck & arms. Very, very good writing!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

I'm laughing because I didn't know you had it in you, Sue, to creep me out like this! Of course you do. You do it all.
xoRobyn

Jayne Martin said...

Delightfully creepy! Good job.

Karen S. said...

Loved your lead opening into the centus as well...very good writing and begs for more...

Darlene said...

Well, this one was really different. I didn't quite know what to expect. Yes, it was chilling. It caught me too, because I just wasn't expecting this. Terrific!!

upinthecosmos said...

Great write... I wanted to keep reading more!:-)

Dazee Dreamer said...

oh my. That gave me chills. Great, great job.

Fiauna said...

Ooh, that was such a good one. Loved it!

Jess said...

I like it- so is she dying or just disappearing form lack of use?

5thsister said...

This story demands a prologue!

Jenny said...

I agree with Polly.

Wow, Sue. This is a different side of your writing. I loved this. What a wonderful visual you created for us here.

My mind races with what happened and what comes next!

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