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Fade to Gray
©2012 Susan Noyes Anderson
Veiled in dreams that once came true,
the memories steal over you.
They cross your face, invade your space,
leave little sense of time or place.
You gaze upon a graying sky,
see darkly through a curtained glass
and ask yourself each question why,
while letting every answer pass.
You're all dressed up, nowhere to go.
A world is aching for your touch.
You're Jane Doe waiting for Godot,
as empty as the purse you clutch.
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41 comments:
Sounds a little like a life mis-spent. Sue, you must have such vivid interesting dreams. The drama you know how to bring to life is incredible.
empty as the purse you clutch...great closure on this sue...you def give this emotion and play well off the pic...
Strong write! Love "Jane Doe waiting for Godot." The sadness in your poem is palpable.
Ditto. You really know how to express feelings very well.
So sad... love the rhythm and rhyme... well done, Sue! The empty purse says so much.
Love the last verse, but the 'musak' is a real turn off!
Moody and dark. Well done.
You have done it. Created such feeling with words that you are now up on the Bradbury, Eliot pedestal. Wow. The imagery, the opposites! I just want to read this over and over letting the words wash over me with the rhythm and imagery. Sigh.
Awww... I think most of us saw the sadness in this painting. I know its what I got from it anyway. Powerful imagery, sad though.
Fascinating poem! Yes, waiting for Godot. The inner emptiness ... a subject that interests me a lot.
moody Monday. I like it...there's some pretty intricate juxtaposing of words here...
Funny..this sort of fits my mood today..unfortunately...I need a happy place to go to I think! But your poem is really good..I know that because I can feel it.
nicely done Sue....thanks for sharing this
I love this! Waiting for Godot is perfect, just perfect.
So melancholy and empty. You are so good at conveying whatever emotion you're writing about! The place she is in is not a good place to be. Action! Take action.
I don't want to be her.
Love ya!
Jane Doe waiting for Godot..a mesmerising piece.
Agree with the above - so many great lines here, one of my faves of yours. Well done. k.
We love poetry with a some moodiness to it. As always Sue your words make an impact. You're a great poet, hope you know it!
Very strong write Sue. I felt like it might be me there looking out the window.
Love ya
Maggie
Killer closing lines!
Oh that poor nonentity. Some nice wordplay too.
Seriously her purse is empty?! No gun not anything?! Ha! Ha! I saw your post for this up yesterday, but I don't like reading any until I've written my own. So guess what, I'm #75 on her list! I've got lots to read.... oops!
great closure.
gorgeous artwork.
you inspire me
How gripping! Waiting..you made that so sad! And for Godot, no less...very good...
A very powerful verse, Sue! It's Waiting for Godot that presents the challenge!
Hsnk
oh man, I hope I always have somewhere to go when I am dressed up.
I can sense the despair in this poem.
such a lonely place to be- well done
Nice rhyme pattern here...love the purse thing at the end...
Lovely as usual! You can feel the sense of emptiness in this one.
Blessings!
I love that you grabbed that 'empty' feeling of the art and were able to express so brilliantly, the sad accompanying reflections, Sue. Bravo!! The rhymes are icing.
Great, as usual!
Another really good one, Sue. I love your interpretation of these pictures. I felt the sadness......oh so much.
Beautiful. You sure have the gift of rhyming and not making it seem forced.
Sue, you just keep getting better and BETTER.
I loved, " You're all dressed up, nowhere to go. A world is aching for your touch. You're Jane Doe waiting for Godot, as empty as the purse you clutch."
Have I mentioned this to you before? I think your poetry would make awesome lyrics for music. Have you ever written lyrics? I would NOT at all be surprised.
Thanks, Caroline. I've written lyrics for several composers, and I really enjoy doing that.
I've also had composers approach me to write music for poetry of mine that they read in a magazine. Twice, I did agree to collaborate with them and was happy with the result.
The most interesting thing that happened was when a Russian composer, who was here performing a cantata he had written, asked me if he could use a poem from my book (the one I did with Anita Schiller) to include in a really modern piece that he later performed in concert. That was really a departure from anything I might have expected, especially considering the poem he chose!
=)
A flowing poem! Veiled in dreams that came true... I love it!
Very beautiful Sue, she has the bloodless porcelain skin of the living dead, though as man has begun to find out, she bites ! .
You gave the picture words....Nice!
Hey! Hey! Loved the flow. Neatly said. I've had a few empty purses in my closet / time!
I am one of those admiring hiw this was written... Awesome!?.
JJRod'z
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