©2016 Susan Noyes Anderson
What is this creature on my chest?
Blue elephant has come to nest.
My lungs are smashed; my heart is crushed.
My whole, wide world in blue is brushed.
Not robin's egg or ocean blue,
more like a mess of midnight goo.
And I'm surrounded by the stuff.
Blue bites! Big-time. Enough's enough!!
It's hard to breathe, harder to talk.
I locomote by belly-walk.
Yo, Dumbo. Get off, dude. You stink.
(Henceforth, my pachyderms lean pink...)
Assignment: Write a blue poem.
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31 comments:
Ha ha, that's great! Can't say i'd like a blue elephant, but the verse is splendid!
Quite clever and delightful read.
This is so fun, Sue. Your poetry is a delight and I can see this one in a child's anthology.
So delightful and fun to read Sue ~ Love your share ~
HEAVENS! I love this! You are channeling Shel Silverstein here (a favorite of mine).
"locomote" as verb = fantastic!
So much fun to read out loud. This would make an adorable children's book, too.
You are going through so much yet you still are able to smile. With someone who has such great talent, writing must be an avenue of coping, yes?
haha - this was quite entertaining - a blue elephant can be heavy on the heart for sure.
Blue elephants all warble Trump's tune, though many do not--cuz his pachyderms are mostly red. I'm jut a blue mule adrift in a red sea of political madness--& your poem pumps levity into the beer-filled bladders who are lining up to cheer the Don--ald.
Haha...what fun this one is! What's up with that elephant anyway?
Chuckles! What of the blue elephant, making a bother to oneself. Sure makes it blue to the soul, Susan!
Hank
"Not robin's egg or ocean blue,
more like a mess of midnight goo."
Haha. This was a delightful read. :D
Oh my god this is just fantastic Sue :D bravo!!
As a nurse we always told patients that chest pain from a heart attack felt as if an elephant was sitting on one's chest. I imagine it would be blue in color!
Writing a poem is always my go-to coping mechanism!
Makes sense to me!
How refreshing! Thanks for the humor and fun take on the prompt. 😂
-imelda
This is so cute! And yet, it in, I saw a metaphor for depression. The difficulty breathing and talking fits perfectly. I suspect that's not what you were going for, but that's the great thing about poetry -- the reader often sees more (or less) than what the writer intended.
The poem is definitely a metaphor for depression...A bit of black humor can be a big pick-me-up when all the world is "brushed in blue."
This made me laugh! I loved "pachyderms" I had to go look it up. It's a very apt word.
A fun read!
Fun, sweet, and lovely. <3
Sue, you are amazing to me. Ok, I did see a bit of depression in this one. Also, because of being a nurse, I thought heart attack.
I do love how you brought out different unique thoughts that can mean more than one thing. I also see some good humor in this one.
Gosh, how do you come up with these ideas; just fantastic.
Sending loving thoughts and hugs your way dear friend! I do hope you are doing well.
The rhyming is perfect.
Crushed ....brushed.
I love the playfulness in this poem - it's always good when blue makes you smile :)
As De already commented, you've channeled Shel Silverstein in this. Love it! (Although, would a pink pachyderm be any lighter?)
Of course! Mood-wise, anyway...;)
Bring on the pink elephants!
Yesterday I took the boys to an exhibit on the Woolly Mammoth at the Royal BC Museum. Now that was a BIG fellow!
I hope your chest is feeling a little lighter.....
Oh --- chuckling I am! Thanks for the smile 😊
Ha! Love it! I'm painting many rooms with a blue theme lately...not sure why but I've always loved that color! Hope all is well with you and your family!
Ah ~ lovely and humorous and yet true ~ sometimes a 'blue elephant' sits on our chest too ~
Wishing you a Happy Weekend ~ ^_^
Very Cute! Did Blue Elephant jump into your mind immediately, or did you have to ponder that heavy load?!?!?
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