Friday, April 13, 2012

Help Wanted: Discerning Readers


I mentioned a couple of weeks ago that I'm looking into publishing a few story poems written for my grandchildren. Now I'm wondering if you might help me.

I need to choose one Easter story out of the two I like best. Anyone willing to read both of them and comment with their preference would be doing me a great service, as I can't seem to decide. Well, actually, I do have a favorite, but thought I'd see if others agree before making the final selection.

The first one you may have read last week, while the second was posted last year. I'd love to hear which appeals to you most.

Thanks!

=)

19 comments:

Tima said...

Yup, sorry, cannot choose. Love them both.

Tale of the Easter Bunny is oh, so cute. It's one Ethan would love and savour.

Miracle of Easter is wise. One, many of my students would enjoy.

Brian Miller said...

cool...heading out of town right now...but will read them this weekend and send you any thoughts...

Grandma Honey said...

I vote for the 2nd one. The first one is very cute, but the 2nd one goes right to my heart.

Wander said...

Same as Brian...will get back to you tonight...very late:-)

Wander

Momza said...

I enjoyed them both. Both are favorites.

Mumsy¸.¤ยช“˜¨ said...

I like the Miracle of Easter more, Sue, but the Tale of Easter Bunny is very cute too. Ok, my choice is the Miracle of Easter..

karen said...

I love both of them, but I have to say it would depend on your target audience. For little ones (under 8) I choose the first one. The message is simple and direct, giving the Easter message in a way that small children can understand. It's not too complicated - it's just enough. For older children (especially if they've been baptized) and adults, I think the 2nd story is perfect. Same beautiful message, but more detailed with information they're old enough to understand. I think for really young ones the second has more complicated information about death and graves that little ones may not fully get (or may be troubled by), but an older child or adult will be old enough to understand and get the full Easter message. You can't really lose with either one, but that is the distinction I would make between the two.

Cheryl said...

Both are well-written and carry a strong message. For me, it's all depends on the age and maturity of the group you're targeting.

Last year's poem builds very strong visual images, ones that could be frightening to younger children. It seems more appropriate for older children.

This year's poem is more whimsical and treats the concepts of death and resurrection in a more gentle manner ~ something a younger child could understand and be comforted by rather than fear.

Nezzy said...

They both are great but if I had to choose it's the Miracle of Easter. Truly touched my heart sweetie!

God bless ya and have an awesome weekend my friend!!! :o)

yaya said...

Both are great but I do really like the second one...but I'm an adult and I think for kiddos the first one would probably be more to their age and liking...sorry, it was hard to choose! Hope that helps. I think Karen really said it best!

Pondside said...

For the under 12 crowd I'd say #1, this year's, for sure. The rhythm is so attractive to kids and the message unfolds very naturally.
Yes - less than a month until the big six-oh. We'll have to splash out with guest appearances or simultaneous blog posts!

Joyful Noise said...

Yes, Karen's remarks are perfect. I would still choose the second one, especially since your grands are getting older (I guess we all get older everyday...)

Vicki/Jake said...

Just found my reader again...
My choice? #1 :) No wait, maybe it's #2...ummm, no, #1. Although if #1 wasn't my pick, it'd be #2. So I guess you best just do both. Ya, #1 and #2. That's all I got:)

Julie said...

My vote is for the second one (last year's.) You are quite the talented lady!

Mormon Women: Who We Are said...

I am with Grandma Honey on this. The first one was darling, and at first, I thought for kiddos that might be good, but the truth in that second one is so beautiful, clear, powerful. It brings the Spirit. And children respond to that. I think their spirits crave doctrine, even when they are young.

(That said, I would still read the other to young children, too. ;) )

Grandma Yellow Hair said...

Could not sleep so thought I would come by and see what you have been up to. Wow was my reaction when I opened up your post.
Picking a favorite out of these two is really hard. Loved them both and can't choose a favorite between them.
I think it depends on the age group that your going for in what your publishing.
Sorry I am not much help. As always Sue your writing is just so amazing and visiting your site always makes me feel better.
Have a wonderful weekend
Love
Maggie

Terra said...

Sue you are such an amazing writer - both are so so very touching. I am partial to the one from last week. I am choosing this one based on what I think my own 6 and 11 year olds would relate to the most. The one that would hold their attention and I would know when they walked away they "got it".

Farmer's Wyfe said...

I liked this year's poem...for a child. My kids were all about the fun of Easter eggs, the hunt, the candy, and I know this one would have caught their attention...just a little bit more. They are both quite amazing though!! :)

Myrna Foster said...

Ack. The last half of my comment is missing. It should read: I would say that the first story would be received better by little ones, while the second story would appeal more to teens and grown-ups. I like both of them. :o)

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