Saturday, March 3, 2012

Inoculation


Jenny's crazily busy this weekend, so she's "letting us off easy." I'm glad, because I've got a busy day myself, with lots to do. Of course, I could never let a Saturday pass by without submitting my Centus (100 words plus the prompt, in red below).

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Inoculation
©2012 Susan Noyes Anderson

Saying goodbye was harder than she thought,
but then, it's true she rarely thought at all.
She acted and reacted, forged ahead,
kept moving, praying that she wouldn’t fall.

His words coiled round her heart, hissed in her mind.
She ran from feeling, ran from failing, too.
He stole whatever peace there was to find,
left her in shattered pieces, old and new.

On hands and knees she picked those pieces up,
put them together, owned them one more time.
His soul was bitter coffee in her cup---
she drank him down, choked on the muddy grind.

Tasting the toxic in intoxication,
she swore an oath to ne'er indulge again.
Her days with him, she named Inoculation,
and (l)earned, at last, immunity to men.

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25 comments:

Jackie said...

This is good, Sue. Really good. Love.

Brian Miller said...

His soul left bitter coffee in her cup---
she drank him down, choked on the grind


those are some wicked lines...hehe...wonder how long that innoculation will last...this is really good sue...

happy saturday!

Karen S. said...

..."left her in pieces, old and new" so many lines so real and alive. Very nice centus....enjoy yourself this weekend too okay!

Karen Mortensen said...

I love the 3rd verse. So powerful and descriptive. Awesome job.

Bookie said...

Very good!You really used the prompt in a most unusal way today...nice.

Darlene said...

You did it again, Sue.

karen said...

Good job - as always.

Donna said...

Um Hum...Clever, clever job, Sue!!!

Melody said...

Awesome. Great writing!
~Melody
MerrieMelody.blogspot.com

Once Upon an Equine said...

A very poignant poem, beautifully written. And your photo drives home the point. I liked this very much.

Lindzena said...

Great! Love it. I've thought about participating in these weeklies. They look like fun.

PS, look for your name on my blog on Monday. :) You just happened to have updated at just the right time!

Dreaming said...

Laughing at your l(earned)! Nice post.

Thanks for stopping by and commenting about my post about Dad. From what I've heard from him (my Centus is all based on our lives) he is having a wonderful time!

Ames said...

I am so happy to know someone so talented as you!~Ames

Grandma Honey said...

I know someone who "hardly thought at all" and acts and reacts. And then she wonders what happened!
Sad commentary on life, huh?

anitamombanita said...

Excellent. I thought about a similar take (well, conceptually, anyway) on the prompt but decided I didn't need any photos of exes to sully up my blog...LOL... so I opted for sincerity instead of sarcasm or cynicism.

hugs.
anita

Polly Janos said...

WOW! On so many levels!

I do believe this is my favorite piece of yours to date! You stirred up some strong feelings within me with this one, girl!

Substitute the word WINE for MEN and you will see how your prose related to me on an altogether different level.

Gail said...

Another fine job!!!

Connie said...

This poem can be heart breaking and yet it made me chuckle. Very creative.
I've been reading through your past posts. Sounds like you have lots on your plate. Good luck with everything.

Carrie said...

very emotionally charged poem!

janaki nagaraj said...

Awesome...loved every word of this.

writetuit said...

Such a wonderfully creative piece, I was looking for one thing to point out in particular, but each of the stanzas is superbe. Well done!

Caroline said...

Awesome, Sue! Every sentence is packed with visuals. I love how you write! I nearly choked from the thought of the coffee grinds! Loved this one!

Judie said...

I've seen that movie. In fact, I think I wrote and starred in it! Good one, Sue!!

Anna said...

Cool poem!
Anna

Goodbye Pierre - SCwk 96

You may also like to read this story expanded to 400 words for RFWers:
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Jenny said...

Ummm...

Wow.

Soul left bitter coffee in her cup?

Geez.

I need to work on writing much deeper than...

ummm...

sigh...

and gee willikers!

This was really powerful writing Miss Sue.

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