Jenny's crazily busy this weekend, so she's "letting us off easy." I'm glad, because I've got a busy day myself, with lots to do. Of course, I could never let a Saturday pass by without submitting my Centus (100 words plus the prompt, in red below).
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Inoculation
©2012 Susan Noyes Anderson
Saying goodbye was harder than she thought,
but then, it's true she rarely thought at all.
She acted and reacted, forged ahead,
kept moving, praying that she wouldn’t fall.
His words coiled round her heart, hissed in her mind.
She ran from feeling, ran from failing, too.
He stole whatever peace there was to find,
left her in shattered pieces, old and new.
On hands and knees she picked those pieces up,
put them together, owned them one more time.
His soul was bitter coffee in her cup---
she drank him down, choked on the muddy grind.
Tasting the toxic in intoxication,
she swore an oath to ne'er indulge again.
Her days with him, she named Inoculation,
and (l)earned, at last, immunity to men.
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This is good, Sue. Really good. Love.
ReplyDeleteHis soul left bitter coffee in her cup---
ReplyDeleteshe drank him down, choked on the grind
those are some wicked lines...hehe...wonder how long that innoculation will last...this is really good sue...
happy saturday!
..."left her in pieces, old and new" so many lines so real and alive. Very nice centus....enjoy yourself this weekend too okay!
ReplyDeleteI love the 3rd verse. So powerful and descriptive. Awesome job.
ReplyDeleteVery good!You really used the prompt in a most unusal way today...nice.
ReplyDeleteYou did it again, Sue.
ReplyDeleteGood job - as always.
ReplyDeleteUm Hum...Clever, clever job, Sue!!!
ReplyDeleteAwesome. Great writing!
ReplyDelete~Melody
MerrieMelody.blogspot.com
A very poignant poem, beautifully written. And your photo drives home the point. I liked this very much.
ReplyDeleteGreat! Love it. I've thought about participating in these weeklies. They look like fun.
ReplyDeletePS, look for your name on my blog on Monday. :) You just happened to have updated at just the right time!
Laughing at your l(earned)! Nice post.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by and commenting about my post about Dad. From what I've heard from him (my Centus is all based on our lives) he is having a wonderful time!
I am so happy to know someone so talented as you!~Ames
ReplyDeleteI know someone who "hardly thought at all" and acts and reacts. And then she wonders what happened!
ReplyDeleteSad commentary on life, huh?
Excellent. I thought about a similar take (well, conceptually, anyway) on the prompt but decided I didn't need any photos of exes to sully up my blog...LOL... so I opted for sincerity instead of sarcasm or cynicism.
ReplyDeletehugs.
anita
WOW! On so many levels!
ReplyDeleteI do believe this is my favorite piece of yours to date! You stirred up some strong feelings within me with this one, girl!
Substitute the word WINE for MEN and you will see how your prose related to me on an altogether different level.
Another fine job!!!
ReplyDeleteThis poem can be heart breaking and yet it made me chuckle. Very creative.
ReplyDeleteI've been reading through your past posts. Sounds like you have lots on your plate. Good luck with everything.
very emotionally charged poem!
ReplyDeleteAwesome...loved every word of this.
ReplyDeleteSuch a wonderfully creative piece, I was looking for one thing to point out in particular, but each of the stanzas is superbe. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAwesome, Sue! Every sentence is packed with visuals. I love how you write! I nearly choked from the thought of the coffee grinds! Loved this one!
ReplyDeleteI've seen that movie. In fact, I think I wrote and starred in it! Good one, Sue!!
ReplyDeleteCool poem!
ReplyDeleteAnna
Goodbye Pierre - SCwk 96
You may also like to read this story expanded to 400 words for RFWers:
Anna's RFWers Challenge No.33 'I love you because...'
Ummm...
ReplyDeleteWow.
Soul left bitter coffee in her cup?
Geez.
I need to work on writing much deeper than...
ummm...
sigh...
and gee willikers!
This was really powerful writing Miss Sue.