Magpie Tales is Tess Kincaid's writing meme.
Participants respond to a picture prompt (below).
image by Sarolta Ban
point of view
©2012 susan noyes anderson
she always made him small
it was her eyes
he blamed them, claimed they cut him
down to size
she said he lies
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he never stood up tall
she had to rise
he made himself the beggar
her the prize
he said she lies
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Wow! Love this!
ReplyDeleteThe look does say it all.
def perspectives...and perhaps if they got past who was lying and just listened...they might make it...
ReplyDeleteExtraordinary! And..I like "Mad World" to go with! Well Done!
ReplyDeleteSure doesn't sound like a match made in heaven!
ReplyDeleteHow do you do that? I'd still be staring at the picture trying to think of something.
ReplyDeleteYou have to be the "Yoda" of the pen. I would never have come up with something so perfect and clever!
ReplyDeleteI'm like Karen, I would look at this picture and never come up with anything. How you did this, I don't know, but it is excellent!
ReplyDeleteCool poem. You're so good at that.
ReplyDeleteI got a call from a couple people and emails from several others this morning. Sad day, indeed.
Oh yes... I've had people who could cut me with a look. This is perfect!
ReplyDeleteOh, so, it's a bit like 'He said, she said' going on.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the prompt :)
A delightful work of he say she says...
ReplyDeleteThat last line is a killer! I Really enjoyed this, Sue.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully sharp and succinct. K.
ReplyDeleteHA! I love this. If looks could kill... Thank you for this, and also for your visit.
ReplyDeleteawesome.
ReplyDeleteVery well-written.
ReplyDeleteAhhhh perception
ReplyDeletethis is a very good poem, painfull.
ReplyDeleteharsh.
Wander
http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com
An excellent poem!
ReplyDeleteNot a relationship destined for endurance, I think. Excellent response to the prompt.
ReplyDeletewow. Perception. This was very very well done. Sticking with me.
ReplyDeleteReally like the contrasting perspectives and I agree with Brian.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of the eyes curring down to size - succint!
ReplyDeleteOh, very clever. I like this a lot. You're final (cue alibis) is perfect!
ReplyDeleteSuspicion of lying does not make for a great relationship...doomed.
ReplyDeleteI think he's lying when he says she's lying. Either that, or they're both confused. :)
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading this one. :)
He said...she said...
ReplyDeleteI loved it! I can't hear music from your blog on my iPod (not sure why) but I imagined some sort of Mad Men theme music while I was reading it!
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