Saturday, January 22, 2011

Crocodile Tears


Saturday Centus is here again, and with it comes a new prompt and a specific genre: science fiction. (ugh) The good news is that we get to add 100 words in addition to the prompt, which is in red.

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Crocodile Tears

"Beam me up, Scottie..." Laura clicked off the TV and settled into their new-generation tempurpedic. One more Star Trek re-run, and she’d turn into a pumpkin. “A Vulcan,” she corrected, her voice too loud for the setting. But what did it matter? He’d vanished so silently and completely he might never have been there at all. What kind of man slinks away in the night, without warning? “A Reptilian,” she replied, shouting at the empty room as if he were still there to hear.

Lightyears away, he panics. “Coincidence,” he insists fervently to his scaly superior, but it’s too late. She’s already been neutralized.

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31 comments:

  1. AmyJanuary 22, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    Oooooh! I just got the chills reading this. Good one, Sue!

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  2. anitamombanitaJanuary 22, 2011 at 9:42 AM

    Nicely done, Sue. But I have to laugh - I'm so unpoetic. I got stuck on "Beam Me Up, Scottie" and all I could think of was a photo of Jake, our Scottie, staring into space (stalking moths)... a friend, upon seeing the photo, labeled it "beam me up, Scottie"

    The photo is at http://www.flickr.com/photos/13110897@N05/5246019916/in/set-72157624959220941/

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  3. UnknownJanuary 22, 2011 at 9:47 AM

    Ha! I think you may have found your new calling!

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  4. AnonymousJanuary 22, 2011 at 10:24 AM

    That was excellent! :)

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  5. TerraJanuary 22, 2011 at 10:27 AM

    Oh Sue, that was truly very well done. I didn't expect the ending - it was wonderful. Really, wow

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  6. UnknownJanuary 22, 2011 at 10:42 AM

    Standing O for this one. You achieved sci-fi perfection in my book. Bravo!

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  7. JudieJanuary 22, 2011 at 10:44 AM

    What a great ending, Sue! You nailed it!

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  8. CBJanuary 22, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    That was awesome sue - Great ending!

    You inspired me to finally get on the ball and join this week!!

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  9. BookieJanuary 22, 2011 at 11:10 AM

    This is really great! I could never have done this kind of response and you did it SO well.

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  10. Jocelyn ChristensenJanuary 22, 2011 at 11:56 AM

    That's what Congressman Trafficant always used to say...

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  11. VikiJanuary 22, 2011 at 12:15 PM

    Oh this was so good. Kinda creepy LOL. Good job.

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  12. ~LissaJanuary 22, 2011 at 12:26 PM

    Ooh really great job with the genre and fabulous ending!

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  13. JessJanuary 22, 2011 at 12:47 PM

    I suppose that's what one should expect from intergalactic affairs- scaly business those reptilian lovers.

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  14. DarleneJanuary 22, 2011 at 1:01 PM

    I got a kick out of this one, and I'm sure Dick did too. He is a true Star Trek fan, as you know, and I could almost hear the Star Trek theme as I read this. Or it may have been Dick's cell phone.

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  15. Dazee DreamerJanuary 22, 2011 at 5:22 PM

    ok, for some reason, that just gave me goosebumps. NOOOOOOOO

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  16. TgoetteJanuary 22, 2011 at 6:17 PM

    LOL! That was a very cool story, Sue! For being a tough challenge with this sci-fi genre, you really pulled it off brilliantly. Great Centus!

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  17. KatJanuary 22, 2011 at 6:19 PM

    You did a fantastic job with this Sue. I just couldn't get into the whole sci fi thing. You nailed it. I loved the ending, totally unexpected. I loved this! Kat

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  18. RockiBottomJanuary 22, 2011 at 6:32 PM

    Fantastic play on words!!!

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  19. Grandma Yellow HairJanuary 22, 2011 at 6:44 PM

    Sue you really are a awesome person and writer.
    Always love coming by here and enjoying your work.
    Love
    Maggie

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  20. Grandma HoneyJanuary 22, 2011 at 10:18 PM

    Interesting way to handle science fiction!

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  21. People Who Know Me Would Say:January 23, 2011 at 3:16 AM

    Creative and a little scary for those of us with great imaginations, Sue. I think I recognize the Reptilian as an ex-husband of a friend of mine.

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  22. CherylJanuary 23, 2011 at 6:15 AM

    Very cool take on this one!

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  23. lindaJanuary 23, 2011 at 8:08 AM

    Creepy...
    and very well done.

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  24. karenJanuary 23, 2011 at 9:56 AM

    Yes...that was creepy. Is there nothing that stumps you?

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  25. 21 WitsJanuary 23, 2011 at 10:30 AM

    Okay...errie some, but mostly just cool and funny! Thanks!

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  26. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comJanuary 23, 2011 at 4:04 PM

    Sue, I'm ever impressed. You told a story that leaves me wondering; packed it with humor, romance and tension; and I love the outbursts the characters have when alone. It all feels very sci-fi, too.
    You really are brilliant.
    xoRobyn

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  27. VKJanuary 23, 2011 at 7:39 PM

    I think you should now go out and write a si-fi, or maybe just a sequel for Star Trek. I'm sure there's a market for that, and you seem to know all the jargon. teehee
    Seriously, you do have a great imagination.

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  28. AmesJanuary 25, 2011 at 3:19 PM

    I can see it. You pulled this one off very well Sue!~Ames

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  29. Nancy JaneJanuary 26, 2011 at 6:42 PM

    Bravo...brilliant piece.

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  30. Rek SeshJanuary 27, 2011 at 5:39 AM

    A great piece of writing...a Sci-fi with disastrous consequences....some aliens can't be trusted...

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  31. JennyJanuary 31, 2011 at 1:24 PM

    Oh Sue. This was absolutely tremendous! Wow, wow and wow!

    I think you can pretty much write any style, any genre.

    You are amazing.

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