Yep, I'm playing Saturday Centus with Jenny Matlock. AGAIN. (Apparently, there is no cure.) And what could be more fun than taking her prompt of a few words, adding a few more of mine (no more than 100, mind you), and coming up with a mini-tale to please my readers? Nuttin', right? Right!
The prompt is in red.
The Liberation
It felt good, being free. No more rising at the crack of dawn, no more sizzling sand patrols, no more watching my kid grow up via skype and e-mail.
No more jonesing for his father, either. The relentless desert sun had burned those feelings out at last. Not an easy cure, but a welcome one.
The doorbell rang at 6:00, pick-up time. Some things never change, his punctuality among them. I opened the door, looking forward to this final liberation.
Our eyes locked. BAM. So much for the purging effects of war and heat. Objects in the rear view mirror are closer than they appear...
Feelings, too. Some things never change.
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PS. 600th post giveaway coming up on Monday!
O boy, i can relate.
ReplyDeleteGreat take.
I loved how you worked so much into just 100 words!! Wonderful! And I can relate .. some things never do change.
ReplyDeleteI don't know how you make such a deep story out of those few words that you get for a prompt. Genius
ReplyDeleteBoy, can I understand this. Some things don't ever change. Good job.
ReplyDeleteIn our head, we can think we're over something...or someone. But when we're face to face with it, we see the true pull of attraction.
ReplyDeleteI agree. So few words, but So. Much. Said. I love these little mini stories!
ReplyDeleteGood job again.
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to see what your give away is.
Good use of prompt...like the liberation theme...if only we could glance and the rearview mirror and move on!
ReplyDeletewow! this says so very much. a real talent when working with so few words.
ReplyDeleteYep...same with memories, too. Love what you did with the prompt. Terrific post.
ReplyDeleteFantabulous....absolutely fantabulous! Loved the feelings you created with your words.
ReplyDeleteMalisa
Sue you truly are a writer. I always love reading what you post. Great use of so few words and so true.
ReplyDeleteThank you honey for always leaving me encouraging words on my site.
Love ya
Maggie
Hi Sue,
ReplyDeleteI'm just looking around at what everyone here has written before I decide to give it try myself. It looks hard to do. But you are very good at this.
Best wishes,
Anna
BAM...
ReplyDeleteDang heat anyway!
Loved this one Sue
I like the way you've twisted at the end, it's true feelings are always there....
ReplyDeleteWow! Great take on the post! Really enjoyed this!
ReplyDeleteI really like this Sue. You managed to convey so much in those few words, especially the "deflation" at the end. Wonderful use of the prompt! Kat
ReplyDeleteSue, If there was ever a doubt in your mind that you are a wonderful writer, erase it this minute! This is one of the best SC post I have ever read. It's almost a poem, so condensed are these powerful words. Congratulations.........cj
ReplyDeleteI'm always amazed at how, with just a few words, a story unfolds in your mind. I really like the Saturday Centus posts!
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Awesome job this week, Sue. I loved what you did with the prompt. Great story!
ReplyDeleteWow! You have a really great style that hooked me into the story from the beginning, and the ending was excellent. Great job!
ReplyDeleteAdored what you did with this...
ReplyDeleteThis was fabulous.
ReplyDeletethat was so touching. i felt the moment there at the end
ReplyDeleteThis made me shiver.
ReplyDeleteThis was amazing.
Wow.